Monday, September 21, 2009

The Letter - Part II

This post has been written to reassure myself that I wrote the story the right way…

From HER mother’s diary…

A few days after she came back from the camp….

I don’t know whats gotten into Anu.. I m getting so so much scared… N I don’t feel like telling Sanjay… I don’t think he’s noticed any change in her…

It all started the day she got back from the camp….

Even while she was there, she called me the first day evening to tell me…that she’d met a guy… Rafiq… n he’s this… he’s that… he’s what not….

Well, Anu is a girl.. a teenager… and as far as I know, she has not been so smitten by any guy like this before… I know this because I am her mom, n I believe I know her better than anyone else, right?

Well…. I thought it was a crush, a passing phase n it would pass away…

It doesn’t seem to be the case…

She msgs him… chats with him, mails him…

N even talks to him.. the first couple of times, she told me when he called…

But I suspect, it’s a lot more than that…

I m scared… but she is my daughter….

She wil do nothing to break my heart… Will she???

No, I am sure she won’t….

And I have surely brought her up the right way… she knows her values and I know for sure, she knows where to draw the line….

I know she will be cautious… n will not make any hasty decisions…Let’s hope so anyway…

She’s my Anu.. my precious daughter… n to tel u the truth… I don’t like the idea.. of some else getting so close to her… she says… He s a great guy.. n intelligent n intellectual n funny… But…A Muslim… No, I cant allow tht, ever….

Even Sanjay is going to blame me, if he knows….

I hope she thinks with her mind n not jus follow her heart blindly when she has to take a decision….

I am going to the temple now.. to pray… for us… for my daughter…

To give her strength to face whatever she has to…

To make the right decision….



JUS so u don’ t think I am so heartless as not to see it from the guy’s view point…



Jus lets see it this way….


Rafiq was heartbroken, of course, he was…

He had just met, what he thought would be the best match for him ever…

and she dumps him… just like tht…

No, His Anu wouldnt do tht…. Unless…

Unless she has a strong enough reason….

But… I have parents too… n I m sure I can convince them… they ll think of my happiness above all….Y doesn’t she understand???

Y is she not ready to give it a chance????

I believe that if its to be, it will be… and I m still waiting.. for her to come back to me… I live in the hope tht I ll meet her again some day… n we could start over….

Oh God… and if she doesn’t, the memories will stay with me forever…

her smell.. like fresh flowers in spring.. it lingers on…

Her eyes… those sparkling diamonds… with a twinkle in them when she smiles at me….

Y did u ever have to bring us together, if this was in store for us?????

The last entry in Rafiq’s diary says this :

“When all is said and done, you are part of me. That's the way it was meant to be. People are brought together for a reason, everything happens for a reason. I believe the reason that you and me were brought together was because we complete one another. We fill in each other's missing spots with love. And if someday God decides to tear us apart, I trust that there is a reason. Cause if there is a reason for love, there is a reason for life beyond it.”



BUT ….

He ll move on…. I m sure he will… He has to… Its his life, He s a practical person and I m sure He wont waste away his life jus coz someone broke his heart….

Maybe he won’t believe in love at first ( meetings ) any more… but I m sure he will move on…

29 comments:

Neha said...

that was so nice...I really liked it...you know, I wish i could write this way, but i always end up making things complicated when it comes to writing...i somehow cant manage things in simple words...ths is too good...and for the award, this simplicity only made me give u ths one...keep it up gal...i enjoy ur posts..tc :)

VISHNU said...

ahem ahem.. tryin to refrain maself from commenting..

Dhanya said...

Made a good read as always :)

Lakshmi said...

@ Neha...
These lovely comments are the reason I write... U make my efforts worth it...:)
N its now i realize how much I love to write...n Thanks again for the award... :D

Lakshmi said...

@ Vishnu...
Y must u refrain urself frm commenting???
Pls do... evn if u liked it or not...

Lakshmi said...

@ Dhanya... So glad U liked it.. I was not sure of how the response to this post would be... :)

blunt edges said...

the mother's diary entry said it all...the mindset made me cringe!
"she knows her values"

i guess i have said all i wanna say in my comment 4 part-1!

Quest said...

People are born for a reason and that reason I believe will not be love :D

Given the time the mind always shall prevail over the heart as the heart can't think but act ;)

Lakshmi said...

Bluntu... its a story.. come on... don't cringe...This is not the situation everywhere...

buckingfastard said...

'she knos her values'
maybe someday value loses it value...world will be a more understandable place!!!

Rafiq wud get over it am sure....in a world where a person can get over his parents death and still continue his fight...heart break is too small a pain in da big picture

blunt edges said...

lol...ok baba...i ain't cringing anymore! :D

Vishnu said...

actually was busy that time.. n u know ma thing for long comments.. so gonna give it nw..

i stick to my point.. parents need to grow up.. they need to give their children a chance.. they shd think in all directions.. they expect their children to think.. y cant they do it themselves..

wats the point of love if every1 keeps on decidin to move on.. there wont be relationships at all..
i liked the guy's letter.. definitely not the mom's..

Bala said...

Beautiful writing Lakshmi!

Brilliantly narrated the touching thought of a mother and a lover by centering the whole write abt the girl!

Excellent!!!

Beauty and the BEast said...

still struggling for a secular mindset in a secular nation!! how painfully unfair sometimes that can get..

HaRy!! said...

wow i read this first and then the part1...eww of me...neverthless.touching story of a mothers page:) wil b c ing yu here often :)!! tak care...cya around

HaRy

Lakshmi said...

@ Bala... Thanks again...I guess its when u look into real people's life n feelings, u can write like this.. which ppl can relate to.. am so glad u liked it...:)

Lakshmi said...

@ The B n B...
Yeah true...very much painful...

Lakshmi said...

@ Hary...
Thanks a lot...

Lakshmi said...

@ BF...

I liked wat u said in the first part...
the second one... hmmm.. wasnt it a little ... watever? Yeah... I too agree tht he can move on...

Lakshmi said...

@ Vishnu

What if he doesnt move on??? You want him to wander around like a Devdas??? U want him to stop believing in love??? Na, yaar... People have to move on...

The abstract scientist said...

Hey Lakshmi,
Well written story. I liked the way you have covered the view points of both the mother and the son.Esp: The mother's vulneraility that accomapnies her love for her lil daughter,you have printed the emotions of a mother beautifully. kudos. I have a feeling that you will take this story further. i am not sure.
I am a honest commentator. i have an inkling that you could have done the separation of the view points : the place where you start rafiqs viewpoint a lil more prominent and impersonal.
I welcome criticism on my blog too.

Lakshmi said...

@ AS...
Well...The second part wasnt meant to be written... Its jus coz I got such a great response for the first part of the story.. tht I decided to give it a try... n when I wrote frm the mother's side.. I cudnt allow anyone to see me as a cold cruel heartless bitch so as not to think of what Rafiq is going thru.. n maybe... Maybe the story will continue...
N thanks a lot.. constructive criticism is always welcome...

Vishnu said...

in this world..there are 2 types of pple.. ones who are seriously into relationships.. n ones who are in relationships just for time pass.. there are already a lot of pple who fall into the second category.. if the first category pples' relationships also fail.. n as u say they would hav to move on..they will also be forced to think tht the values of relationships have gone and ultimately join the second category.. he wont wander like devdas.. wat am sayin is tht they will stop believing in love and relationships.. i hope u understand wat am tryin to convey..

Lakshmi said...

@ Vishnu..

Yeah.. I do get what u mean.. and u r right, in a way... He might stop believing in love... People tend to do tht... He might even swear he wudnt ever fall in love... But trust me, He wont remain the same forever...Thts bloody love... U dont get to choose when n how u want to fall in love.. its not choice but chance... :)

Insignia said...

Nice one.
Both the mother and the boy are right in their viewpoints. A mother, is always worried about the welfare of the child.

The guy here seems to be practical, to move on, and definitely love would find him eventually :-)

Vishnu said...

accepted..:)

gayathri-vishwanathan said...

This post sense to me...though honestly I want the mindset of the society to change. One of my best friend shybu is a muslim and I trust him as much as I trust my dad and mom...people need to become open-minded.

Lakshmi said...

@ Insignia
Thank you.. glad u liked it.. :)

Lakshmi said...

@ Gayu....
U got it all wrong here.. I ve got a best frnd who is a Muslim too.. it doesnt matter...
Evn Anu might hav Muslim frnds.. But it is choosing a Muslim as a life partner tht her mother objects to...coz she is worried bout how her society wud see it.. BE it a muslim or a Christian or a Hindu, the only thing that matters is tht he should be nice... loving n b able to take care of u.. thts the only thing tht shud matter..right? :)